Week 6 Story: Lost in Space
I published this story on my Google Sites. It can be found here!
Bibliography: Indian Myth and Legend by Donald Mackenzie
The year was 2200 and the world was a different place. Earth
had achieved some wonderful things. Space travel for recreational purposes.
Self-driving cars that decreased the number of accidents drastically. Robots
were highly efficient and intelligent. The healthcare system found cures for
almost everything imaginable. But at a cost to the planet. There were so many
people that the government had to institute a very strict population control
measure. Citizens had to apply to become parents. Only those of top physical
and mental health were allowed to raise a child. And even then, only one per
family.
The earth sent ships into outer space to orbit the earth a
year at a time. This allowed for more room on the planet. There were dozens of
them. Kunti lived aboard the Durvasas station. She was the young and beautiful
wife of the commander, Pandu. They had applied for parenthood and were granted
permission to carry a child. Kunti couldn’t be happier! After months of trying,
she could not get pregnant. She didn’t understand.
One day, Kunti was sitting in front of a large window
looking down at the earth she loved so much and sorrow filled her. She wanted a
baby more than anything. A stranger approached her and tried to comfort her. He
could see the despair in her eyes. Kunti recognized him immediately as a
visiting dignitary from another ship. She wiped her eyes and tried to smile. This
was no way to welcome guests. She showed him to her suit where they had a feast
to celebrate his arrival. This gentleman was a charmer!
Several weeks after the unusual visitor had left, Kunti felt
her stomach begin to grow. Alas, she was with child! She was finally going to
be a mother. The next 9 months were the happiest of Kunti’s life. She prepared
a room for the child and gathered every blanket, toy and decoration she could
get her hands on.
When the time came to give birth, Kunti experienced a
shocking surprise. She was carrying twin boys! What was she going to do? The government
would only allow her to keep one. And who knows what would happen to the second.
And how could she choose? She pleaded with the nurse to help her hide her secret.
The two had become good friends during her pregnancy and she obliged Kunti’s pleas.
Once the babies had been born, she snuck the seconds one back to her chambers. She
wrapped him in blankets and hid him. What was she to do? How could she be
caught with a second child? Her husband would surely loose his position as
commander and they would risk loosing all their children and going to prison.
Kunti devised a plan to put the child in a pod and release
him into space. She prayed to all the gods of the past and the future that the
child would be safe. She hoped that someone without a child would find him and
take him in as their own.
It was late at night and all the inhabitants of the station
had been long asleep. With tears in her eyes, she snuck down to the
transportation room with the baby in her arms. She kissed him on the forehead
and sent him out. Her heart broke as he drifted off.
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The day was blistering hot and Radha was out foraging for
food. Their planet was of simpler means than earth. They were at the end of the
galaxy beyond were humans believed life to exist. It was quiet and peaceful.
Birds still chirped and if you listened carefully, you could hear the water
rushing in the street over rocks and tree branches. The air was crisp and
smelled of freshly cut grass.
Radha was a plain for a woman of the Anga species. She was
slender and had thin hair. She was not loud about her dress or appearance. She
enjoyed working with her hands and tending to others. Her and her husband,
Adhiratha, had been praying to the gods for children for ages. She had resigned
herself to being motherless for all her days.
On this particular day, she was in the forest collecting
berries when she came upon an odd rock. It was clear on one side and shone
bright when the rays of the sun looked upon it. The closer she got, she realized
it was not in fact a rock; it was glass. And something moved inside! She cautiously
moved closed to get a better look. What she saw would change her life forever.
There was a tiny human baby inside this rock. She rushed to open it and swept
the baby up in her arms. She looked around quickly to make sure there were not
more. Or that it wasn’t a trap. Alone they sat in the middle of the of the
forest stream. This was the answer to all her prayers.
She brought the baby home and nursed him back to health. The
poor babe had been hungry and filthy. Some warm milk and a bath was enough to
quiet him back to sleep. Radha’s husband returned home after a long day of work
and inquired about the child. When Radha explained how she had found him, her husband
began to rejoice.
Two couple took the boy in as their own and raised him as
their family. They lived many years in their quiet town. Tending to their herd,
baking berry pies on Sundays and enjoying the simple pleasures that life had to
offer.
Author’s Note: This story was based off the reading of Kunti
and Her Son from the Mahabharata Part A. The original story was of Kunti, wife of
Pandu. She had a child that was not her husbands and was shamed to have it. She
put it in a basket and placed it in the river. Radha found the child floating
in the river and kept it as her own. Although some of the character’s names are
the same and the plot is basically the same. I changed the setting of the story
to make it more modern. The original story reminded me a lot of the movie The
Prince of Egypt as well. Where Moses was set in a basket and floated down the
river and the Pharaoh’s wife found him and raised him as their own. All three
as different takes on the events but have similar back bones.
Bibliography: Indian Myth and Legend by Donald Mackenzie
Title: Sun Over Earth
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Sarah,
ReplyDeleteI have to say I found your story more interesting the original. The thought that must have went into coming up with this story is amazing! They could very well make a movie regarding this! Where did you get the idea to make it a planet that couldn’t hold any more people and so had spaceships with people in orbit? That was genius! I love your story and I can’t wait to read more!
This was phenomenal! It could also be that I like space stories but I was hanging on to every word. This had great description and even though the story isn't long I had a full blown picture in my head on how it would look. There was even a good deal of character development and even with no dialogue I felt like I knew what conversations were being said. Please tell me you want to be a writer?!
ReplyDeleteKunti's story of her son she sent away to be adopted by Radha being into a space setting is so creative! How you traded the basket down the river for a pod floating through the galaxy is something I couldn't dream up even if I tried. Everything works so well in this story! I never thought such an ancient story could so seamlessly be updated to be modern or better yet, futuristic. I also appreciate that you didn't stop the story after he floated away, having that second section that spoke about his fate with his new family really tied up loose ends that sometimes are left loose for those trying to create an air of suspense and wonder but sometimes satisfying the curiosity and concluding the story works just as well as you've shown here! Lovely!
ReplyDeleteHi Sarah! I was going through your other stories and found this one and am very impressed! I think this story is very creative and well written. I think the way you put your own twist on this story was very clever. I also loved your attention to detail because it made me able to visualize what you were writing which I found to be very cool! Overall, really great job with this story!
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