Week 2 Story: Hot Pursuit
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It was a crisp fall night and Officer Jack Rabbit was five hours into his ten-hour shift. No amount of coffee seemed to clear the fog that settled in his brain.
It was a crisp fall night and Officer Jack Rabbit was five hours into his ten-hour shift. No amount of coffee seemed to clear the fog that settled in his brain.
POP! POP! POP!
Gunshots rang through the air and that’s all it took for
Officer Rabbit to spring into action. He quickly rounded the corner and saw a
small gold sedan take off.
This was his big moment, he thought to himself! He was going
to catch the shooter and prove to his partners he wasn’t just a rookie anymore.
He lights them up and the vehicle takes off. Officer Rabbit
calls on the air for backup and the chase is on! They travel down Lake Hefner
Parkway; their speeds increasing to 70mph.
Soon Officer Bambi and Sargent Dumbo fall in line as secondary
and paralleling units.
As they continue South, speeds increase to 85mph. Surely the
suspect doesn’t think they can outrun three police officers!
More and more officers converge to the area to join the long
procession of patrol cars in the pursuit. It has gone on for over ten minutes
now and the excitement in the air is electric! News helicopters swarm the air
hoping to get a glimpse of late-breaking-news to broadcast on live television.
Frantic citizens swerve into the shoulder to avoid being clipped by the crazed
lunatic evading the police.
The suspect exits the highway and pulls into the parking lot
of a gas station. The ten officers in hot pursuit park haphazardly to block all
exits. They rush out of their cars, guns drawn, and remove the suspect from
their vehicle. The cuffs come out and the female driver is placed in the
backseat of Officer Rabbit’s patrol car. His smile is so big his cheeks start
to hurt. He caught is bad guy…or girl!
After a quick search of the car, no gun is found. Officer
Rabbit scratches his head in confusion. She must have thrown it out during the
pursuit and he didn’t notice.
Soon, Lieutenant Mufasa arrives on the scene to help
question the suspect. As he leans down to see the face of this hardened criminal,
he’s taken aback by who he sees…Ms. Ruby Caster, an 86-year old grandmother of
8 sitting with her hands laced in her lapped.
After a few brief questions and a very hearty laugh, Lt. Mufasa explains
to Officer Rabbit that Ms. Caster’s car backfired causing what sounded like
gunshots. When Officer Rabbit asked why she didn’t stop and why she was driving
so fast, the Lt. explained that Ms. Caster was running late for a dinner with
her 8 grandkids and because she was running late, she left her hearing aid at
the house and couldn’t hear the sirens.
Officer Rabbit felt defeated and embarrassed. The Lt. left
his with these wise words, “Always think before you take action. Ask questions
when things don’t make sense. The world is not always breaking apart around you.”
Author's Note: For this weeks story, I chose to re-write the story of the rabbit. This was the one that stuck with me the most. It was about a rabbit that heard what they thought was the world breaking around them. They ran and ran and ran and soon others ran too. No one knew the details, but they ran anyway. When the King Lion challenged them to find out why they were running, it was found to be a coconut that had fallen and made the sound. Although I tried to make my story funny, I see this type of thing happen almost daily in real life. We are humans are followers and we don't ever stop to ask why we are doing some of the things that we do.
Bibliography: "The Foolish, Timid Rabbit" from Jakata Tales by Ellen C. Babbitt. Web Source
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Hey Sarah! I really like what you did for this story. You can feel the suspense and tension building as Officer Rabbit gets closer and closer to the "criminal". I like how you also hint at the beginning about him just being tired so that the whole story comes together at the end. I also like how you added character names you resonated with like Mufasa, Bambi and Dumbo. It made the story a bit more fun. Your story was a lot of fun to read and I can't wait to read what else you write.
ReplyDeleteHi Sarah! I really enjoyed reading your action packed story. It was very descriptive and fun to follow along with. I, like Jess, enjoyed the use of familiar character names. I wonder if you visualized the characters as animals? For example, was Mufasa a lion or a human? Overall it was a great story to read and I really liked that you made the story your own.
ReplyDeleteHey Sarah!
ReplyDeleteAt first I was confused as to where you got your inspiration from. I think that is a great thing to happen because it means your story is original and well thought out. I actually did not realize it until the authors note. It was very well told and made me laugh picturing an old woman being swarmed by 30 police officers. It may not be funny, but I have a weird sense of humor.
I also liked that you gave the lion a recognizable lion name, so I wish you had put a more recognizable face to the old woman and officer rabbit. That is really my only complaint and its a very minor one. Great story!